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No.403
The cold winter night. I heard the knocking on the door. I closed my Europa Universals 4 game and got up.
She was standing there, behind the door, knowing I wouldn't dare to left it closed. I opened the door.
Agatha came in, with her regular appearance, so simple and beautiful in the same moment. Her hair was cuddling under her hat, and became a little messy when she got it off.
"How's life, Anon?" Asked she softly, with the same firm ASMR voice I've been hearing every evening for the last few months from my old laptop.
"It's... umm.. Okay?" Answered I. Agatha looked at me with kind of disgusted look. I know I'm not the charming one, but the reason she came here makes this fact the last thing I cared about at the moment.
After a minute-long silence I got my thoughts together and managed to say something. "The money... It's right here..." mumbled I silently.
"What?" Said Agatha, obviously mocking me. She probably realised my character, and her overwhelming superiority over me in our dialog.
"The money is there, Aggie..." Told I after taking a deep breath, and looked at her pitifully. She was smiling in the most mocking way she could.
"How did you call me?" She said, taking the money for her visit from the desk.
"Aggie.. Agatha."
"I heard that. I mean, you're too disgusting to call me that. I feel dirty hearing it." She replied, taking her coat and boots off. "Even the reason you invited me is making me sick. You better be happy I agreed to came forward. Even this $900.000 don't really overwhelm this disgust. It's probably all your life savings, right, Anon?"
"Y-yes..." I answered, lowering my eyes. That was really a result of working a few hard years saving every cent I could.
"And you wanted to spend it all to make me use you in such a low way?" She looked even more disgusted, but strangely happy. With her high and soft voice she said, "Then start by kissing my feet."
She already dropped off her boots, and got her leg up for me, while I was sitting in from of her on the chair. I smelled it, she probably was wearing those socks for a few days. "Right Anon, they're not the fresh ones. I thought I'd make you lick them, instead of cleaning it by myself." Agatha looked at my face, and right in my eyes. I remembered all the quiet girl from the streams, and realised, she wasn't quite like that. Agatha liked me being under her feet, licking it off after the long road.
¨ No.404
>>403
I got a stiffy, not bad.
You should seriously cut down on the beta loser cuck shit, and elaborate on the feet and femdom part. Maybe you could write about Agatha secretly smearing her feet on a guy's face off screen during a stream, or forcing a guy to eat her out off screen during a stream.
The last paragraph is 7\10, everything else is 3\10. I twitched a bit at the part where she took off her boots.
Keep going, I wanna read more
¨ No.405
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>>403
>>404
"Anon, take the socks off!" Screamed she in her common tight voice, and started rubbing her toes over my mouth. I tried to get my hands on her foot...
But the kick on my face almost made me lose my boner. "Don't you dare touching my beautiful feet with your hands! Take those socks off with your jaw, you perv." Said she look closely on what I'll do next with the smile on her face.
I slowly got her toes up in my mouth, looking up in her face, which was beautiful, but so evil as she stared down at me cleaning her gentle feet. Her cuddling hair swayed as her body was moving alongside with her shoving foot up in my mouth, trying to make it as hard for me to take her smelly socks off as she could.
Finally, I managed to take the sock off. I was holding it in my mouth, when Agatha took her foot up to my face again, and stuffed the whole sock inside my throat with her nude foot. "I hope you like it, because you won't get it off your mouth until you manage to get the second one off." Told Aggie with her favourite mocking tone, slowly moving another foot under my face.
I began struggling, trying to get the end off Agatha's sock among my teeth, which was not only humiliating, but also hard to do with another dirty sock down in my throat. I felt its taste flowing out every time I was trying to hook another one. "You know, imagine how cool it would be for you to attend on one of my streams." Said she, slightly moving her foot, making it harder to get. "Well of course I don't mean you being in front of the camera. Who needs you? Only my dirty feet, and I, as your mistress." Continued Agatha.
I agreed with her. It was a miracle that Agatha decided to come forward and use me whatever she wanted too.
"Just imagine, I'd do my regular stream, eating some toasts, and you, laying down the floor, so only I can see you eating my feet. Imagine the use of it, I'd make a stream, so freaks like you can watch it and imagine themselves at the place where you are now, and my feet cleaned by you, pervie." Slowly told Agatha, while enjoying the full control over my face with her foot.
¨ No.406
>>405
*Fix*

"Anon, take the socks off!" Screamed she in her common tight voice, and started rubbing her toes over my mouth. I tried to get my hands on her foot...
But the kick on my face almost made me lose my boner. "Don't you dare touching my beautiful feet with your hands! Take those socks off with your jaw, you perv." Said she looking closely on what I'll do next with the smile on her face.
I slowly got her toes up in my mouth, looking in her face, which was beautiful, but so evil as she stared down at me cleaning her gentle feet. Her cuddling hair swayed as her body was moving alongside with her shoving the foot up in my mouth, trying to make it as hard for me to take her smelly socks off as she could.
Finally, I managed to take the sock off. I was holding it in my mouth, when Agatha took her foot up to my face again, and stuffed the whole sock inside my throat with her nude foot. "I hope you like it, because you won't get it out of your mouth until you manage to get the second one off." Told Aggie with her favourite mocking tone, slowly moving another foot under my face.
I began struggling, trying to get the end of Agatha's sock among my teeth, which was not only humiliating, but also hard to do with another dirty sock down in my throat. I felt its taste flowing out every time I was trying to hook another one. "You know, imagine how cool it would be for you to attend on one of my streams." Said she, slightly moving her foot, making it harder to get. "Well of course I don't mean you being in front of the camera. Who needs you? Only my dirty feet, and I, as your mistress." Continued Agatha.
I agreed with her. It was a miracle that Agatha decided to come forward and use me in whatever way she wanted to.
"Just imagine, I'd do my regular stream, eating some toasts, and you, laying down the floor, so only I can see you eating my feet. Imagine the use of it, I'd make a stream, so freaks like you can watch it and imagine themselves at the place where you are now, and my feet cleaned by you, pervie." Slowly told Agatha, while enjoying the full control over my face with her foot.
¨ No.407
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Here are some constructive criticisms:
Less mouth stuff, more nose stuff.
Less "arrogant soy brat", more "assertive controlling femdom".
Less writing about things she wants\plans to do, and more writing about actually doing those things.
More descriptions of how the mc is feeling, how each of her actions turn him on and how much, etc. (read hentai manga for reference)
Less text in general, more condensed text.
It's suppoesd to be a sexual text, right? So get to the point. Just write about what shes doing, what shes saying, and the reactions he has to it. That's what you should focus on.
She needs to be more sadistic and tease the mc way more (ex she steps on his face, notices hes getting hard under his pants, laughs\teases him about it. maybe puts her other foot on his crotch, mc displays pleasure and losing control)(goon captions may be a good reference for sadism)
You need to have escalating tension and a climax. You've just been writing about the initial 5% of their interactions.
The mc should be crazy about her, so avoid negative stuff like "almost lost my boner". Almost everything she does to him should make him freak the fuck out.
I wanna see more aggression. You've been holding back on the sadism\humiliation. If you're going for evil agatha, let's see it for real.
Mentions of how she's seemingly getting into it, once she starts doing stuff, would be pretty good.
The smelly\dirty socks, feet on face, and worn socks for days parts were especially good, keep it up.
Here are some scenarios or writing prompts:
>Agatha prohibited the mc from fapping for 2 weeks, she is now playing with him and he's pent up and sensitive to every little tease. (bonus: in those same 2 weeks, she hasnt showered, smell fetish prompt)
>Agatha does a ~10m stream, is rubbibg her feet on mc's face\dick. Escalating pleasure\tension\edging (mc thinks about how he cant hold it in, so close), and near the end, she steps hard on his dick and he explodes. bonus if she says something subtle and vague on stream, like "come". After he finishes she excuses herself from the stream
>Agatha uses mc's dick as a dildo, she gets on top and rides him, he's forbidden from cumming (maybe strap rubber band to his dick, hentai style) maybe at the end she unexpectadly cuts the rubber band and lets him explode inside her
>Agatha comes to mc's place for dinner. During dinner, she teases mc by putting her foot on his lap
>Public teasing: Agatha and mc go on a date in public. (maybe mc is pent up in this story too). On the crowded train she rubs her ass on his crotch, or squeezes her boobs on his chest. During lunch she takes her shoes off and puts her feet on the mc's lap\crotch. He's in public so he has to keep calm and resist the stimulation
>Bonus public: Agatha shows up with flip flops on purpose just to provoke mc
>Agatha invites mc to her place for lunch, but at some point mc realizes she put aphrodisiacs in mc's food. (maybe additionally, some time later, she reveals that she put aphrodisiacs in her OWN food too. Crazy horny sex follows)
I'm enjoying your stuff so far, so keep going.
¨ No.408
>>407
Wait. Are those Aggy's feet ?
¨ No.409
>>408
No they're not. I wish Agatha had feet pics like those though.
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I've been coming back to this thread for like three weeks now. Just the idea of Agatha's feet anywhere near me gets me rock fucking hard, even when I'm in public I cant control it. Every time I think of this thread my balls start to churn. I constantly feel like I havent came in two weeks.
Every day for past three weeks I come home from work, drop everything, and run to my PC to jerk it to Agatha, my dick already throbbing and twitching with excitement. Every day I drop my pants, and my underwear is a mess, full of precum from thinking about Agatha for 8+ hours straight. Feeling the wetness in my underwear, my hard dick pushing against my pants, and my balls aching to cum is borderline torturous. Every day I edge for multiple hours to the thought of Agatha stepping on me, shoving her feet in my face, and teasing my throbbing dick with her big feet. At the end when I imagine her giving me a full weight aggressive footjob, I cum so fucking hard I need multiple kleenexes to contain the flood of sperm I shoot out. I go lightheaded and can do nothing but whisper her name over and over, as my dick pumps out lots and lots of cum just for her. Agatha's feet and the idea of bully Agatha are making me go crazy
This thread has awakened something inside me. I cant take it anymore, I'm fucking begging you, I need more
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>>419
Gonna write something later. The thing is I'm fucked with studying right now and the writing goes slow as the English is far from main language I'm using.
¨ No.421
>>420
That's alright, take your time. As long as it actually arrives, I'll wait.
¨ No.422
>>420
>dat pic

Thats something I want to wake up to erveryday.
¨ No.427
>>419
By the way, this isnt even fanfiction, this is my daily life for real.
Here I am again at the end of another session.
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And here am I, alone in my house, again.
It already was a few weeks since Agatha visited me here. And my desire was growing monstrously as I was reading her messages again and again, imagining the moment of our future meetup.
The rules were strict, but I was following it with pleasure, as Agatha was the one writing it for me. The whole month I had to spend without cumming, while she was texting me almost every few hours, trying to make me lose for those pictures of her feet she was sending me. There were new pictures every day, and I had to do a really hard job stopping my hands from touching already almost blue balls, while seeing these beautiful feet of Aggie.
In the end of the month I was dripping wet, and thought I'll accidentally cum with my hands off while scrolling through the pics of her dirty sole and worn sock hanging in the end of it. The picture of Agatha's foot in close view, shrinking her fingers, so I could clearly see the pieces of her dirt among them made me almost lose my mind, trying to get the thoughts of me licking it clean away.
Like in a dream, I was thinking about all of it, going straight to the address Aggie texted me. My dick was hard all the way from home, I felt only excitement, and a great desire. I woke up from my thoughts only in front of her door. I knocked.
She just stood there, in front of the opened door, in her slippers on barefoot. Her face had an evil smile on it, Agatha probably noticed me not being able to get the sight off her feet.
"Get in, Anon. I can see that you've been waiting for this quite a long. Probably you already see my legs as your deity." Said Aggie, taking a seat in front of the closet.
I felt crazy as my cock became even harder after her words, although me thinking of it as impossible before. All I wanted at this moment was just a touch of her foot, and Agatha was abusing my wish as well as she could. I could barely take my coat off as she was sitting in front of me with the strict look on her face, cross-legged, moving the foot from side to side, making the slipper lay on the edge of her little thumb, almost falling. I felt pain as my dick was growing strong in my jeans at the moment I felt the smell of Aggie's feet, not being washed for a few weeks already, only getting more dirty with every walk she had.
As I finally undressed, I fell on my knees before her. She let me take the slippers off. I was holding it in one hand and touching my jeans with the other, as I was feeling more and more pleasure with every smell of Agatha's unwashed feet on her slipper.
"Take your jeans off and lay down, sick pervert." told she in her favorite singing like tone, and crossed the smelly feet above me, as I was laying down on the floor. Agatha was wearing short pants which was ending a bit lower of her timid knees. It was making me go crazy, to experience such an attitude from, back then, shy and cute girl. But now, my dick was almost ripping off the panties, as she was looking at it with a hunting look and a smile. Her feet were just above my face. Those smelly, dirty soles was making me forget about everything, and I just wanted to help Aggie get them clean, to lick the every bit of her foot, and get the permission to cum.
¨ No.430
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>>403
Holy shit I really get off on how big her feet are. They look really huge for her size, it's such a turn on.
How tall is she anyway, about 5'1-5'3 maybe? (155-160)
Oh fuck this is sending me into a footfever.
¨ No.432
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>>429
Oh man, this one's the best so far.
The fap ban, the teasing pictures (REALLY GOOD), the scene at the door with the slippers and evil grin, the escalating descriptions of the mc getting more and more excited, the dangling, the smell, the contrast between the sweet Aggy and the sadistic one, the fact that he's still forbidden from cumming. It's all really good.
I'm really happy with this result, you took the criticisms and improved. Overall I'd give it a 8.5\10. This is legit some top tier stuff.
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Is there a way to monetize the erotics writing stuff? As I'm almost always low on cash, that would be cool to get at least some cents from it. Where should I start from?

Btw next part is almost ready but I'm working on a project for my university rn. Gonna post it soon. Aggie is still a goddess and her feet are still the greatest desire.
¨ No.441
>>440
AFAIK, your options would be to post writings for free and set up something like a paypal or crypto wallet for donations, OR you could set your work behind a pay wall, like patreon.
¨ No.442
>>440
Post them on youtube(with a robot voice) or wattapad
¨ No.443
>>441
>>442
Nah I'll just continue dumping it here but with my btc wallet attached if anybody will want to help.
Maybe later I'll do some kind of patreon but with the lowest price possible to use it mostly as an archive.
¨ No.444
>>442
That's a great idea. He could use text to speech like those greentext story videos. If he does though, he absolutely needs to not have any background music. That shit always ruins the videos.
¨ No.445
>>444
Would be even better to find and get some gril with kind of Aggies tone to voice her replics
¨ No.446
>>445
That too. Although I personally really hate how fake some female voice actresses sound. Like they're trying too hard to be "cutesy" to the point where it breaks the immersion.
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And just like in a dream, I felt unbelievable pleasure when Aggie finally stepped on my face. Her foot was completely covering my jaw, and I began washing the dirty sole with my tongue.
The smell of it was so bright that I just couldn't feel anything other than her feet, or maybe I just didn't want to, as I felt myself edging with every piece of dirt I licked of those precious big feet, and with every blow of the few-weeks-old smell of it, as Aggie was looking down in my face, with such an expression as she was ready to laugh and disgusted in the same moment.
"You really like it that much, Anon? What a sick pervert you are. I guess I'll give you your bit of pleasure, if you do your job right. Keep cleaning them, and there better not be any smell left!" Said Aggie with the half-deafened and soft tone of voice, which she usually used on the asmr videos. But now this voice was making me lose my mind over taking all the dirt she was getting whole month off her, to make her timid and pure again, by licking every millimeter of the sole from this beautiful, hot, and strong smell just for her pleasure and even a small possibility of mine.
As I was holding Agatha's toes in my mouth and licking them while she was playing with my tongue, I felt her other foot over my rock-hard cock.
My whole body twitched as her little toes touched my dick, and began slowly pressing on it.
As Aggie's feet got through my panties, I felt the every inch of her little foot on my cock. The feels overwhelmed my head as my hard dick was trying to stand right under this little devilies' foot, which was making it practically impossible. I was gasping for every little piece of air, but my mouth was constantly gagged with Agatha's other foot, and it was getting only harder after every convulsion my cock had, trying to slip through her cute toes, as she was pressing the whole dick tight to my body.
"You must feel very excited, right? Having month without any masturbation is pretty hard. You know, I was having a lot of fun. This is too hot, to imagine such a perv to lose his beloved toy. I was feeling horny every single day because of you. You know..."
Aggie suddenly took her foot off my cock, and the other one off my face. I felt a sudden wave of temptation realizing she didn't gave me my orgasm. Do I really like Agatha torturing me so much?
"For the beginning, clean this mess. You're so gross, Anon!"
I felt a wet foot on my face again, but this time, the other. It was much colder. Only in this moment I realised how much of precum there is, and the thoughts of me cleaning it off Agatha's precious foot made my will to finally cum monstrous.
I reached for my cock, but her large foot stepped right ony hand and pushed it hard to the ground.
"You're not doing this right now, perv. I've just got an idea. How about being my feet-chair for a small mukbang stream? You'll sure like that, and besides, you pretty much have no choise, if you wanna cum already. So start licking this crap off my pretty foot or I'll make you suffocate under it." - said she slowly, with a mocking smile and a domineering gaze on her face.



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¨ No.451
>>450
Qt eyes
¨ No.452
>>450
Hmmmmm pretty damn good. I reckon it's time to finish him off.
¨ No.453
>>452
Already wrote it. Waiting for an end of my exams to check for typos and gonna post it then.
¨ No.454
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¨ No.458
I found a really good manga, it has a lot of stuff Id like to do with Agatha.
https://hitomi.la/doujinshi/denki-anma-no-mandagi-san-no-ane-english-1789986.html
¨ No.461
>>458
Ok, let me watch this.
¨ No.470
Made something nice
https://streamable.com/e4tg1v
¨ No.471
>>470
Wtf this is nice
¨ No.473
>>470
>>471
I dont quite understand it, it seems like either mental illness or the work of an AI. I dont dislike it though.

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